Friday, July 15, 2011

Mona Aaliya – My lady Aaliya

The pillow gossips remained till the confirmation of the sleeping of children. In aftermath Jamal had another splendid night with Aaliya.

With far away resonance of Aazan Jamal noticed movement from bed. Aaliya was taking her bath. Sonnet of sprinkling water droplets over floor of attach bath had a heavenly effects on ears like the way bhujaan purifies the sins of burhamans.

With half opened eyes, Jamal seen chaddar covered nymph standing on a prayer carpet. Watching last praying part of the congregation session was angelical. Aaliya angled her chaddar driven head to 90 degree right and then 180 degree left in order to conclude salams and raised hands.

Closed eyes and whispering lips were evident of the dedication towards praying. The monumentality of the composition and atmospheric illusionism were novel qualities of the sight that had contributed to the continuing fascination. For the moment Jamal felt jealousy for the God on account of Aaliya’s allegiance and submission.

Upon folding of prayer carpet Aaliya noticed the eyes of Jamal over her and said: What are you looking at? “Nothing!” Jamal replied in total absenteeism and while hiding his state counter asked, “What you were asking from God with this dedication?” In reply Aaliya just smiled with enigmatic facial expressions. The mesmerizing face glow was a look alike dawn marking beginning of twilight before sunrise for a surround darkness.

Aurora now had left her saffron bed,
And beams of early light the heav'ns o'erspread,
When, from a tow'r, the queen, with wakeful eyes,
Saw day point upward from the rosy skies.
(From Virgil's Aeneid)

Jamal thought that if he were Leonardo da Vinci the world surely witness portrait more promising then Mona Lisa.

(This blog is a sequel of earlier posted blog “Umeed-e-Bahar” dated November 27, 2009)


  1. Beautiful, simply Beautiful . .
    The expression and the concept is marvelous, Hats Off Mr. Shahid.

  2. "Beautiful writing! Reminds me of a scene with Irrfan Khan & Tabu from the movie Maqbool..."
    (Nouman Khanzada-Karachi)

  3. If letter "K" suits Karan Johar for his successful movies surely "M" works the same way for my blog writings. Earlier it was "Mount Everest" and this time "Mona Aaliya – My lady Aaliya". My latest creative writing is one of the most thought out work of mine so much so that i was planning to write this blog for the last 3 years!

  4. Well Shaid, i am missing the content or you may say the central idea in this writing. "Quite verbose but philisophically hollow" would be my one liner for this one pager.
    And to give more decent elaboration to pleasure filled night; GET MARRIED ASAP...

    Naeem M Anjum

  5. Awesome man! I hope to see another sequel of this Jamal-Aaliya chemisty!

  6. Its an excellent piece of portraying the hight of fascination.. i likw your unique observation in" Aaliya angled her chaddar driven head to 90 degree right and then 180 degree left"...! you beautifuly painted the praying morning of a muslim... women and the level of satisfaction a female receives after praying and in the same prportion inner satisfaction of female co relates ...with senstivity of imagination of a male...and closing at Virgil's Aeneid completed the strokes...!!!

  7. selection of namaz in the sketch were fantastic....!!!

  8. Excellent portrayal!

  9. I am convinced that no one can write a romance blog as beautifully as U.

  10. Man! Whats good in that??

  11. Please write more sequels for the Jamal/Aaliya chemistry!!